Board Thread:News and Announcements/@comment-27447138-20160813004937/@comment-29678654-20160815153101

Dudegi WC wrote: TheDeltaSnivy wrote: The Anti-Weegee Alliance were planning a drastic attack to wipe out the Weegees for a long time. Weegee, Malleo and Greegee luckly found this out before the attack and called upon their armys. The AWA then killed many innocent Fakegees until Weegee and the others  came to stop the massacre. The AWA then sent out their best troops againts the Weegee Armyes and the weakest againts the citysons. The weegee armys then started attacking the AWA troops who stayed behind. Mostly everyone who lived in the city were being wiped out until Greegee started attacking the AWA troops that were sent to attack the city. Most of those troops died but one was still fighting Greegee. The Mahziis attacked the Un Ded while Weegee's Army attacked the other half of the AWA. Weegee had regret when he killed his son Samaweegee even though he betrayed Weegee. The war whent on for about 3 months until Weegee, Malleo and Greegee almost died except Weegee became Dark Weegee and almost destroyed the entire AWA. He returned to his normal form, thinking they all died. Some members of the AWA were still alive and plan an even more devistating attack in secret...
 * Rather confusing in the middle especially
 * Samaweegee can't die
 * Doesn't say who lived
 * Lack of detail at the end

Not bad overall, but has some work to do. I can't tell what the AWA are attacking (is it a single city, are they going to different planets, are they fighting in space and sending small troops to fight on the ground?), but it has potential. Ok, thanks for the advice.